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26 January 2010 @ 07:05 pm
Prison Break - Coming of Age  
Title: Coming of Age
Author: clair_de_lune
Characters: Michael, Veronica, Lincoln
Category: Gen
Rating: PG
Word Count: 200
Disclaimer: Not mine. Just borrowing them for a while.
Summary: Clichés are clichés for a reason...
Author’s Note: Foolishly unbeta’ed.


Vee won’t take him to Linc; she won’t let him see his brother – You’re too young. She doesn’t explain why he’s too young, though. So Michael does what he knows will work even on Vee who, aside from Linc, knows him better than anyone else. His lower lip wobbles and a single, shiny tear rolls down his cheek; he heaves a sigh and stares at her through wet eyelashes. Clichés – but well... clichés are clichés for a reason. Vee yields; she mumbles she’ll regret this sooner rather than later but she yields.

He inwardly gloats. That is... until they enter the dingy apartment where Lincoln has passed out, high on only God knows what. Different kind of cliché. There are no prettily quivering lips or glistening eyes anymore, then. His mouth twists in an ugly way and he’s too busy trying not to choke on his distress to hold back his tears. He doesn’t protest when Vee squeezes his hand. He knows it’s not entirely true, but he wants to believe that she holds onto him as much as he holds onto her.

He is too young – but he ages just a tad faster when he crouches by Lincoln’s side.

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End note: Long ago, alohomoraa ranted about clichés in fics. More specifically the single and shiny tear rolling down the character’s cheek, if I remember correctly. The other day, there was on TV someone crying that (in)famous tear and, at the same time, when I refreshed my friends page, alohomoraa was posting a (different kind of) rant about writing.
To make it short: I get my plot bunnies from the weirdest conjunctions of events, apparently ;)
 
 
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Jackie: Lincoln and V: Loveyougottaletmego on January 28th, 2010 06:16 pm (UTC)
Ooh interesting plot bunny! I liked it. That is a very common cliche.

Just on a side note, if you ever need a beta reader my door is always open :)
Clair de Lune: origami - canardclair_de_lune on January 28th, 2010 08:05 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

Indeed. Hopefully, the title is rather common too, as is a character having to grow up a bit too fast because of a relative's bad habits... It was fun to write it on purpose :-p

I want to precise my usual beta-readers didn't let me down: I just didn't want to bug them for something so short. That being said, I appreciate the offer and will definitely keep it in mind - I usually avoid posting without someone taking a look at the fic, if only to check the grammar. Thanks for offering :D
Jackie: Lincoln And LJ Runningyougottaletmego on January 30th, 2010 06:43 am (UTC)
I figured you had plenty of betas. But being a fan fiction writer myself, I know how nice it can be to have a beta. So I figured I'd throw it out there :)

Write more soon, please!
Clair de Lune: text - i knowclair_de_lune on January 31st, 2010 01:55 pm (UTC)
I know how nice it can be to have a beta
It is *nods* You can never have too many potential betas :-p
sassy, classy, and a bit smart-assy: MikeLincUnCuffbadboy_fangirl on January 28th, 2010 07:17 pm (UTC)
He is too young – but he ages just a tad faster when he crouches by Lincoln’s side.

*weeps*

Man, I really miss them.
Clair de Lune: pb - brothersclair_de_lune on January 28th, 2010 08:06 pm (UTC)
Me too *hugs*
It was nice to write something gen again, though.

Thanks for dropping by :)
Tori: pb | bleak | always on the runtorigates on January 28th, 2010 10:02 pm (UTC)
Aw, this makes me miss PB a bit. Very good!
Clair de Lune: origami - canardclair_de_lune on January 29th, 2010 07:24 pm (UTC)
I know! *sighs and casts a glance at DVDs*
Thanks for readiing and commenting, Tori :)
alienmom: confessional michaelalienmom on January 29th, 2010 12:07 am (UTC)
oh, michael, such a manipulator at a young age. well, you got what you wanted, but it isn't what you expected, now was it.

He is too young – but he ages just a tad faster when he crouches by Lincoln’s side.


that line completely broke my heart. *sniff*

lovely little ficlet with a wonderful 'tone'. =]
Clair de Lune: pb - michaelclair_de_lune on January 29th, 2010 07:25 pm (UTC)
And I'm not sure he learned the lesson ^__^

It's nice to know the last sentence works for you. The point was to write something playing on clichés - the tear, the situation, the theme... - but when I finished it, I facepalmed because well, it was cliché. I'm logical like that *g* and reassured you liked it.

Thank you :)
Maz (or foxxy!): Linc and Veetuesdaeschild on January 30th, 2010 01:23 pm (UTC)
At least it's a cliche with a purpose! It got Michael what he wanted and how could Vee resist yielding to his appeal?

Alas the cliche crumpled completely on seeing his brother that way. And that last line is soul-wrenchingly sad. :(

Short but oh-so-touching, sweetheart. Love it, even if it did make me feel somewhat downhearted. And yes, you do get your plot bunnies from very unusual sources!! ;)
Clair de Lune: pb - brothers kidsclair_de_lune on January 31st, 2010 01:55 pm (UTC)
The whole drabble was supposed to be more or less cliché-like. The tear, obvisouly, but also the situations and the theme. What do you want, I do have my plot bunnies and my fun from weird sources ;-)

It got Michael what he wanted and how could Vee resist yielding to his appeal?

You know, I realize just now that it can be read in two different ways: Vee may have yielded; or Vee may have wanted to teach him a lesson, knowing that later, she'll regret being so harsh o_O
Maz (or foxxy!): Linc and Veetuesdaeschild on January 31st, 2010 03:16 pm (UTC)
The whole drabble was supposed to be more or less cliché-like.

Of course!! I was kind of reading it on one level but there is an underlying craftiness to it!! Smartly done, sweetheart! :)

Vee may have yielded; or Vee may have wanted to teach him a lesson, knowing that later, she'll regret being so harsh o_O

Yes!! Maybe she thought that by showing Michael what Lincoln was really like it would stop him idolising his brother the way he did. It could even have been the moment, the catalyst even, that eventually caused the rift between the two of them because Michael might suddenly have realised that Lincoln was spending hard-earned cash on drugs and getting deeper and deeper in trouble? Okay, now I'm thinking too deeply perhaps!! An intriguing idea though!

I do think Vee would have come to regret her actions though. :(

Clair de Lune: pb - brothers kidsclair_de_lune on February 1st, 2010 08:24 pm (UTC)
I was kind of reading it on one level but there is an underlying craftiness to it!! Smartly done, sweetheart! :)

LOL, no worries, a lot of the time, some stuff exists in my mind only. Even I forget those details after a while. It doesn't matter as long as I had fun writing it :-p

About Veen, I was thinking of a lesson along the line of "when someone tells you something for your own good, consider thinking about it" or "if you don't believe me, see by yourself" but yep, your interpretation works too *nods* And either way, in the end, Michael didn't listen, did he?

Edited at 2010-02-01 10:30 pm (UTC)
Maz (or foxxy!): Linc and Veetuesdaeschild on February 4th, 2010 05:41 pm (UTC)
LOL, no worries, a lot of the time, some stuff exists in my mind only.

'While you might enjoy your mind coming up with some lovely stuff don't be selfish and be sure to share!! ;-)

I was thinking of a lesson along the line of "when someone tells you something for your own good, consider thinking about it" or "if you don't believe me, see by yourself"

That works for me too! But maybe, just maybe, when Michael wants to see his brother he won't take no for an answer...and really, when did Michael do anything for his own good?!!

but yep, your interpretation works too *nods*

Or I was just being a tad too analytical? ;-)

And either way, in the end, Michael didn't listen, did he?

Sadly for him, no. :-(


Clair de Lune: text - follow your heartclair_de_lune on February 6th, 2010 01:17 pm (UTC)
I will share for sure :-p

Or I was just being a tad too analytical? ;-)

I'd rather say you were using your imagination, which is, you know... a good thing when you happen to write fics ;)
(Anonymous) on February 5th, 2010 06:28 pm (UTC)
dear, can't believe you're still writing p/b fics but want to utterly thank you. am rewatching all the seasons to comfort myself as missing Linc and Michael is so hard. and this sort of adds something to it....
Veronica and the brothers. oohhh..
Clair de Lune: origami - canardclair_de_lune on February 6th, 2010 01:15 pm (UTC)
I'm not as productive as I used to be, but every now and then, I still write them - and I'm happy there still are a few people around who enjoy the fics. Thank you for reading and letting me know :)
Alo': Ø | I see angelsalohomoraa on February 21st, 2010 07:38 pm (UTC)
Dis donc, je t'inspire :)
Ca faisait longtemps que je n'avais pas lu une fic PB (en même temps depuis que tu es tombée du côté dark side des pairings...). Et c'est... étrange. Parce qu'il y a ce que les personnages sont devenus et où la série les a entraînés et où je les ai lâchés. Et puis il y a le début, le commencement que j'ai tellement aimé. Et ce n'est pas si facile de se souvenir combien on a aimé le commencement quand la suite ont été aussi décevant.
Merci de m'avoir aidée à me le rappeler. :)
Clair de Lune: pb - brothers kidsclair_de_lune on February 23rd, 2010 08:01 pm (UTC)
Vi, tu m'inspires ;) Jadis, un rien suffisait à me donner une idée de fic. Désormais, c'est suffisamment rare pour être souligné.

Les saisons 3 et surtout 4, sans parler de la fin, m'ont tellement déçue qu'elles me gâchent plus ou moins le reste. Je me retrouve une série qui gardera une place à part, mais avec un arrière-goût pour le moins amer. D'un autre côté, c'était tellement catastrophique et différent du reste - dans le mauvais sens - que j'ai de plus en plus de mal à réaliser qu'il s'agissait de la même série. Ce qui me convient : j'en garde ce que je veux.

Merci de m'avoir aidée à me le rappeler. :)
Tout le plaisir était pour moi ;)